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如何提高你的英语写作能力?这四个技巧让你分分钟从C飙A

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如何提高你的英语写作能力?这四个技巧让你分分钟从C飙A

  写作文对于学生本身就是一件让人叫苦连天的事情,而用英文写,那可绝对是噩梦。既要写的环环相扣,富有逻辑性,又要用恰当的英文词汇表达出自己细腻的情感。唉,北美学霸君也是hold不住啊。其实,每一篇我们膜拜的好文章都经历了多次修改的锤炼,只有不断的自我修改,自我审视,才能提高自己的写作水平:成为一代写作大神。同学们,仔细的阅读下文的建议,开始努力吧!

如何提高你的英语写作能力?这四个技巧让你分分钟从C飙A

文|魏剑峰

From 英文悦读

怎样修改一篇作文

  On Writing Well 的作者 William Zinsser 认为,改写是写作至关重要的一部分(Rewriting is the essence of writing)。很少有人能一下笔就写出完美的文章,好作品都是经过无数次修改之后形成的。

  这句话放在平时的写作练习也同样合适,修改是一个很重要的写作环节,在打磨一篇文章的过程中,我们能够学到很多关于用词、句式和逻辑的知识。每个人都应该学会修改作文。 一般来说,我们可以从以下几个方面着手对文章进行修改:

  1) 用词:对照词典检查是否出现词不达意或用词冗余现象;

  2)句式:检查是否有语法错误,比如主谓一致,垂悬句式,时态问题等。对于冗余句子可以进行精简。

  3)逻辑:检查各个论点是否符合要求,论据是否充分有力,段落展开过程是否做到逻辑清晰。

  为了更好地说明上述修改过程,我以最近修改的一篇学生作文为例进行分析:

  这是一篇雅思作文,原始题目如下:

  People believe that using mobile phones and computers to communicate make us lose the ability to communicate with each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

  原始作文版本如下:

  We live in a world where communication through state-of-the-art technology such as smart phone and computer is here to stay. Some people consider those wall-to-wall tools can harm our ability to communicate with people face to face. I concur with this opinion. I do believe phones and computers not only rob man of much time and room for face to face, but also reduce the level of people’s interpersonal communication skills.

  The modern communication tools are going to make massive inroads into daily life, directly reducing people’s time and opportunity for face to face. A most popular YouTube video—“I Forgot My Phone” is a case in point. The two-minute video begins with a couple in bed. The woman stares silently while her boyfriend pays no mind and checks his smartphone. The subsequent scenes follow women through a day that is downright dystopian: people ignore her as they stare at their phones during lunch, at a concert, while bowling and even at her birthday party. The clip ends with women back in bed with her boyfriend at the end of the day; he is still using his phone. It needles people about addiction to that little screen and suggests how a modern electronic gizmo nibbles away at people’s face-to-face time and chances. Smartphone and computer-obsessed culture also kill man’s skills on reading non-verbal communication. According to psychologist, 90% of communication between people is non-verbal. Such as the expression on face, bodily gestures or tone of voice, to name but a few, can all show one’s feelings or thoughts to the other. However, if someone, day and night, is glued to the screen of mobile phone for chatting and tweeting and, all the time, is married to virtual worlds of computer for gaming and socializing, he will hard to catch the subtle tone in employers voice, see parents’ expression as it changes from sad to outraged, and look partners in the eye to see if they are trustworthy. In fact, people heavily relying on screens and losing non-verbal communication could give rise to suspicions, misunderstanding, even divisions. In conclusion, I am convinced that technology, especially computers and phones, is a good servant but a bad master for communication. If people were continued to stare at screens, they would have lost true face to face and even more than now.

  这篇文章可以从下面几个角度进行修改:

用词

  用词不当:

  1) Smartphone and computer-obsessed culture also kill man’s skills on reading non-verbal communication. kill 不能和 skill 搭配,此处可以改成 hinder/weaken, 后面的介词搭配也有误,不能说 skill on doing sth. 而是 skill at/in doing sth.

  2) bodily gestures 生造表达,可以改为 body language

  3)In fact, people heavily relying on screens and losing non-verbal communication could give rise to suspicions, misunderstanding, even divisions. 其中 heavily relying on screens 词不达意,这里要表达的意思是“对于过度依赖手机通讯的人”,句子可以改成 Heavy reliance on eletronic communication could lead to misunderstandings.

  4) I am convinced that technology, especially computers and phones, is a good servant but a bad master for communication.


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